Intro notes from Bevan: The principle difference between the re-write and the original is a slight change of direction, a slightly different motivation for Jeremy to leave the confines of his house and enter the outside world.

I feel that the principle theme of the story is Jeremy growing up. He leaves the safety of his family to experience the world on his own, develops mentally and emotionally, and in the end physically ages. I don't think this is hinted enough in the first ten pages of the original text, where Jeremy simply goes for a walk to clear his head. I feel it would be more effective if he starts off feeling more restless in the world his parents have created for him. Therefore, my principle motivation in re-writing the text was to have the metaphor of growing-up a continuing thread throughout the story.

There was something about the wind that had always fascinated Jeremy; something beyond the sound it made or the way it felt against his skin. It was that the wind caressing his face was a wind that had been blown from far away; it had kissed trees and flowers in places that Jeremy could only dream of. It whispered things in Jeremyıs ears, asking questions that he could not understand, with answers that he needed to find.

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